im thinking about puting a story here on this site called "Jake's Notes to Self", but it's not ready yet. (No, it's not explict other than some swearing and use of... less that legitamate businesses.) I need the comments and verdicts anyone would like to put down about what I have so far of the rough draft, which is about a paragraph long. I'll just put down below:

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“Hey Xe!” said Jake, “how’ve you been?” Xenos responded with his usual: “Bug off, you twit…” and walked away. Jake didn’t understand what was wrong, as he never did when it came to Xenos. “Awww, come on man, not that again.” “Leave me alone…” “Well fine then… (Hmph)” Jake still had much to learn when it came to this planet, he may have an IQ over 300, but he had practically no common sense and couldn’t judge people’s feelings yet, even when reading their minds. Xenos just sighed and walked off. “Hey Xe! Wait up!” Xenos still remembered that day, seven years ago, after all, it’s not every day that a winged alien fugitive lands on you in the middle of the sidewalk while he’s fighting off bounty hunters.
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so, how is it? please don't say all kinds of over the top, unnessesary, and overall just brutally unkind things. also, I would like it if you all could give some suggestions for the rest of thhe story, but if you could care less, then just don't say anything.
thank you,
Jake.